User:Dublin1501/Phyllis Ellis/Woodwix Peer Review

General info
Dublin1501
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Dublin1501/Phyllis Ellis
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Phyllis Ellis

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:

The lead is a great improvement from the lead on the existing article. Instead of focusing mostly on Ellis's sports achievements, I think that the lead could be improved with a wider look at Ellis's career. It is described as multifaceted, but from the lead alone, all we know (apart from sports achievements) is that she wanted to be an actor/director as a child.

Content:

The content is relevant to the topic and up-to-date. It only focuses on Ellis's career as an actor, however, which misses a large part of her career. Even though the lead only talks about her sports career, the content only focuses on her work in the entertainment industry. I would rework your content to make it more balanced to all sides of Ellis's achievements.

Tone & Balance:

This article is neutrally written and provides a balanced view of Ellis's life. No suggested edits here!

Sources and References:

The sources are well-rounded and establish notability for the subject. There seems to be an issue with source #4's link, so that should probably be checked- otherwise it looks good!

Organization:

Lots of these paragraphs could be separated into smaller sections to improve readability. It might also look better if the filmography section was written as a table, instead of a bullet-point list.

Overall Impressions:My suggestions for this article are very minimal, and I enjoyed reading it! The most important piece of improvement would be to polish the lead and provide a more well-rounded look at Ellis's sports career, as it is a very important part of her story.