User:Ducksarethebestbird/Voting behavior/Mem0207 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ducksarethebestbird


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ducksarethebestbird/Voting_behavior?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Voting behavior

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I really like your idea for adding an entire section dedicated to gender, as it is largely passed over as a factor in the article as it is today. The lead mentions gender as a factor in voting behavior, but the following article as it is now does not expand much on this. Adding your section will give the lead something to point to, which is great. Your content is relevant, neutral, well-written, and well-organized. Your sources are reputable and diverse. Your links work properly.

One area you might expand upon is where you refer to "issues especially salient to women." Describe or list for readers what those issues are, and perhaps mention the postmaterialism we've discussed in class. Additionally, towards the end, you describe what is essentially the role model effect. I would call it by this name and cite some literature on the phenomenon as a way of incorporating more sources and legitimizing the effect.

One idea I have for an addition to an existing section in the article is for the "military voting behavior" section. The second paragraph of "Voting behavior types" mentions that women are more likely to work in public sector jobs, so this section might mention that men are more likely to be in the military. If military service impacts voting, and it is a gendered career, then it is a notable gendered impact on voting behavior.

Finally, I think you can find a more relevant image than the one you currently have of Kamala. I would recommend something about women voters rather than elected women politicians, since that is the main focus of your content.

My overall impression is that this is a strong article and you have drafted a strong addition. I look forward to reading the final product. Nice work!