User:Dudu120/Environmental health/AMaizing2021 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dudu120


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Dudu120/sandbox


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * User:Dudu120/sandbox

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead section has good direction and information but the sentence flow could use work. You should make your lead section an individual section instead of current organization. I think if you write more concise than the lead will read the way you want.

Your topic and material is highly relevant and you have good sources to back them up. The total organization good...I liked how the sections were broken down. Overall the content was great and it is informative; however, the article needs to be restructured here and there for clarity purposes (i.e., nutrition in human evolution section).

Great work putting all this information together!