User:Dullaten45/Sed festival/Thespongeboy Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dullaten45


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Dullaten45/Sed festival


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sed festival

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * 1) The lead section:
 * 2) Great job on with giving detail in the lead about what the article is going to be about. The first paragraph is great with giving basic information on the Sed festival.
 * 3) The only thing that I could see some change is maybe shorting the second paragraph since it a bit long and could maybe be rewritten but that pretty much it for the lead.
 * 4) Clarity of Article Structure:
 * 5) The article body is greatly structure with following a chronological order with the time line of the pharaohs and dynasties. Though the only thing that is weird is that one sentence is by it self and does not fit right in the middle of the first and third paragraph.
 * 6) i saw was that in middle of the article body there are two paragraph that are pretty much the same information repeated. The paragraph talking about several pharaohs not doing the festival is repeated again in the next one.
 * 7) Coverage Balance:
 * 8) Overall, Everything is greatly balanced and everything covered is related to the article.
 * 9) Though the only thing that is weird is that one sentence is by it self and does not fit right in the middle of the first and third paragraph.
 * 10) Content Neutrality:
 * 11) The article is very well told in a neutral way and I saw that you remove section that made the article that is biased on one side. Great job!
 * 12) Sources:
 * 13) Great job with sources with being good sources to use for Wikipedia
 * 14) Though maybe one more source could be good, but the article itself might be on a topic that is not covered by other authors and we did have limited time to find sources, so this one you can skip on.
 * 15) Overall: The article is very well done and just need a few fixes but that pretty much it. The follow of the article is great with having information be related to the article and the lead may be a little long in the second, but overall it is a good article. Great job!