User:Dumplings4ever/Walkability initiatives in Barcelona/Bcnsae111 Peer Review

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Dumplings4ever
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-the article seems to be supported by more than 2-3 reliable sources and they are all cited through footnotes which is easy to understand and wikipedia appropriate/approved

-my only concern of any opinions within the article that arent neutral is saying what a healthy lifestyle is and how it includes a daily workout regime because some people may not agree and it seems like you may have made that up. Perhaps sharing the definition of what a healthy lifestyle is could add more credibility to that statement and not leave it so much for interpretation

-with the abundance of data on the benefits of walkable cities, it seems a bit like you may be writing a position paper about why walkability is good rather than focusing much on the actual initiatives Barcelona has

-focusing much on the American studies to back up the paper can be a little distracting as it talks about general walkability studies, rather than just Barcelona or Europe even

-Given that you named these sections mental and physical health of Barcelona I feel like it would be important to add more data regarding just Barcelona rather than so much American statistics and studies

-the article has alot of data and general information but not much specific information to Barcelona itself so I worry the actual focal point of the article gets a bit distracting

-I would add as much information of the physical and mental health of Barcelonians if possible and include actual studies that back up these claims too

-Try to replace much of the American studies with Barcelona studies instead if possible

-instead of talking about the general benefits of walkability focus it on Barcelona and really on the initiatives they have/are implementing, as well as the benefits of them