User:Dumplings4ever/Walkability initiatives in Barcelona/Roobeo123 Peer Review

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Walkability initiatives in Barcelona (dumplings4ever)
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For the most part everything is relevant to the article and helps to further my understanding of the topic. In the lead it talks about Maslow’s Hierarchy of Needs, so I thought that would be mentioned in the article, but I don’t believe that it was. I think that if it is not talked about more, then maybe it is a bit distracting in the lead since that is setting up the outline for the body of the article.

I would say the majority of the article is neutral. It is a bit biased towards walkability being very beneficial for health in Barcelona, but that makes sense because it is the topic and there is evidence to support it. Maybe add a bit more concrete evidence or counterargument, but I liked the part where it mentioned how the studies have limitations.

I think there could be more information about Barcelona specifically and their walkability and how it has affected everyone. I feel like the majority of information is just about mental and physical health, but maybe try to tie it more into Barcelona specifically if there are available sources for that. I like how you brought in the 3rd space theory again in the last paragraph, maybe try to have that talked about more if possible.

The sources all work and support the correct claims in the article. The last body paragraph did not have any citations yet, but I assume that is something that will be done. Most of the citations are from health journals or universities, and I think that is really good because it shows the credibility. I don’t think that any of the information is out of date, the article does a good job of talking about what Barcelona is doing now with their walkability and city plans.

Overall, I really liked the article and thought it was great. I just think it could be expanded on a bit to prove the point a more, especially in the last body paragraph. Also maybe try to put more sources that support how Barcelona is a “model city” or a “source of inspiration”, because while I'm sure that’s true, people might think the article is biased and favoring Barcelona. I’m not sure if it is required or not, but there are no pictures, and I think they could be useful in making the article better. I think it is clear and concise and well written. There were two paragraphs that started with “Two US universities conduct studies” and I was confused if these paragraphs were about the same universities/studies or were different.