User:Dunsno/Turn (swimming)/Sjohn194 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dunsno


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Dunsno/Turn (swimming)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Turn (swimming)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead: You may want to include a line in the lead about how different turns are used depending on the stroke and race, since the article is about the different types.

Content: The content is all very relevant and concise. I think you could expand the contributions you wrote in brackets into separate full sentences in order to provide more information, for example what causes something to be considered a grab, and what the consequences of that are. The phrase "kick into the wall" may be confusing - having competed in backstroke I understand what you mean, but the visual that line gives me is literally kicking the wall, so you may wish to say "does any more flutter kicks towards the wall" or something similar.

Tone and Balance: The article and the contributions were quite neutral.

Sources and References: I noticed that you cited Swim Canada regulations. you may want to specify that the article refers to Canadian rules, or cite FINA resources instead in order to prevent confusion in other countries. On a technical note, I believe you do not need two endnotes for the same source, you may want to double check the citation module on this.

Organization: I think it would be beneficial to bold the names of all the turn types, or potentially make them subheadings.

Images and Media: Some diagrams of the different turns would be extremely helpful if they are available, or even photos showing the other two types of turns clearly would be great for increasing understanding.

Overall Impressions: This article is clear and concise.