User:DvDel/Yosyf Semashko/Norgusbjorgus Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

DvDel


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 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:DvDel/Yosyf_Semashko?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Lead
Your lead is very concise and does a great job of briefly summarizing the content of the article. It doesn't have any information the article doesn't, and has the appropriate amount of detail.

Content
The content is very relevant, on topic, and current. However, you do not even mention Semashko's death. This is a very important part of the man's life that is not even touched upon.

Tone and Balance
There is no balance issues and the tone is fairly neutral. I never got the impression you were trying to persuade me of anything.

Sources and References
Your sources are all current and thorough. However, some of your claims go uncited. I will list some examples:


 * "Subsequently, he became an archbishop in the Russian Orthodox hierarchy, elevated to the Metropolitan bishop of Vilnius and Lithuania in 1852."
 * "His autobiography and a collection of documents associated with his life were published as Zapiski Iosifa, Mitropolita Litovskogo (The Notes of Yosyf, Metropolitan of Lithuania, 1883, 3 vols)."

There seem to be other examples, but I cannot tell if they are substantiated by a source cited a sentence or two later or not.

Organization
The content is well-written and well-organized, but there are a few grammatical mistakes and some punctuation errors. I will list the ones I noticed:


 * "As there were almost no Catholic churches in the region, in his childhood Semashko attended Orthodox services more often than Catholic."
 * I would rewrite the second clause to "Semanshko attened Orthodox services more often than Catholic in his childhood." Pretty sure the technical advice is to use an active voice and not a passive one, but I'm not an English professor.
 * "His mother tongue was Ukrainian, he learned Polish at school."
 * Needs a conjunction between the comma and "he." Reads very robotic, as if from a list.
 * "Delighted by the splendor of the Orthodox churches in the Russian capital, and at the same time alienated from the Roman Catholic clergy, which in his view treated the Uniates in a condescending way, he adopted Russian identity."
 * Change to "he adopted a Russian identity."
 * "In Uniate churches, whose appearance and equipment had undergone Latinisation in the previous decades, iconostases, Orthodox utensils, and liturgical vestments were restored."
 * You have an extra space before "iconostases."
 * "The church was subordinated directly to the Procurator of the Holy Synod, who was a secular official rather than a cleric."
 * Extra space before "Procurator of the Holy Synod."
 * "Afterward, Semashko declared of himself "The Lord, having chosen his instrument for the completion of this noble deed, animated him with insuperable fervor and gave him powers to overcome all obstacles.""
 * Need a comma after "himself."
 * "In 1852, he was elevated to the rank of metropolitan, which was a rare case of the elevation to the metropolitan rank of a bishop in a provincial cathedral."
 * I can't pinpoint exactly what's wrong with this sentence, but I don't like the end. I would rewrite.

Images and Media
Your images are great and well-placed, and captioned correctly. I do think you could use at least one more, however, preferably of a different style.

New Articles Only
Your subject definitely meets Wikipedia's notability standard. Your list of resources is good, but you could definitely use more. Furthermore, you lack a table of contents.

Your article is very discoverable and linked well.

Overall Impressions
Your article is strong in it's exhaustive detailing of Semashko's life in the parts of it you mention, but it lacks where you do not. Like I said earlier, you lack any mention of his death beyond the infobox. Aside from that, there are some grammatical issues, and you could always do with more sources. Overall, excellent work.