User:Dvuliudsklifski/Petrushka/855Quilly Peer Review

Wow! You added so much information to the article! All I can say is that it is a massive improvement from what it was before your additions.

I think the information is presented in a good order. I think it's good to explain what the puppets are to the audience and the different contexts they were used in.

Updated suggestions :)
Upon looking at the article once again I noticed that some of your paragraphs are extremely long. Idk if it's universally accepted but sometimes a huge chucnk of text can be a bit off putting and in a mobile environment will be harder to read. I would say if there's a good break point in a few of your larger paragraphs it would be easier on the eyes and palatable information sizes for readers to absorb the information.

I think the additions you made give an wider depth of information than the original. I liked that you still kept the parsley portion but gave a bit more context to the linguistic origins. Russian has quite a few homonyms especially depending on where the vowels are stressed.

One thing for spelling is that it seems like on the internet French accents are being utilized more frequently in the loan words. The words such as fiancé may be underlined red in your version but you could change them to the accented versions if you wanted.

Just out of curiosity, is there anything in the 21st century that's notable in world of Petrushka? Like children's books? If you have access to this information I think it would be cool to see something concerning it. I get that this might be a bit more difficult but it would be cool to end it on a somewhat current century note.

Also we don't have to keep the Lead in the article title do we? It seems a bit off putting. I'm not sure if this is necessary for mine either!

I don't have much else to add other than it's a significant improvement!

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