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Article Evaluation: Alchemy and Chemistry in the Medieval Islamic World [Great job, especially with the talk page suggestions!]
 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * The main paragraph of the article distracted me. There was too much information that was not directly Islamic alchemy and chemistry in the medieval world. The information was useful, but should be in a subsection lower in the article, not dominating the main paragraph.
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * The article is neutral, and showed no evidence of bias.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * The history leading up to Alchemy and Chemistry in the medieval Islamic world is overwhelming, and provides a lot of info that I did not find necessary pertinent.
 * Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * The links work, and do support the article
 * Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
 * The sources I checked met all of this criteria
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?
 * More information on the outcome of these experiments on future Islamic science and religion, as well as effects outside the Islamic culture could be explored.
 * Check out the Talk page of the article. What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?
 * A lot of the conversations I found to be counterproductive because two of the main articles were arguing and being a tad snippy instead of focusing solely on the article and staying professional
 * How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?
 * The article is a C-rated article
 * How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?
 * We have talked about alchemy and chemistry, and we have talked about the Islamic culture. However, we have not talked about alchemy and chemistry in the Islamic culture

Sources for partner Wikipedia assignment

1) Lindenmann, Jean. “Typhus Vaccine Developments from the First to the Second World War (On Paul Weindling's 'Between Bacteriology and Virology...').” History and Philosophy of the Life Sciences, vol. 24, no. 3/4, 2002, pp. 467–485. JSTOR, www.jstor.org/stable/23332560. Accessed 4 Oct. 2020.

2) HUMPHREYS, MARGARET. “A Stranger to Our Camps: Typhus in American History.” Bulletin of the History of Medicine, vol. 80, no. 2, 2006, pp. 269–290. JSTOR, www.jstor.org/stable/44448395. Accessed 4 Oct. 2020.

3) Stapleton, Darwin H. “A Lost Chapter in the Early History of DDT: The Development of Anti-Typhus Technologies by the Rockefeller Foundation's Louse Laboratory, 1942-1944.” Technology and Culture, vol. 46, no. 3, 2005, pp. 513–540. JSTOR, www.jstor.org/stable/40060902. Accessed 4 Oct. 2020.

4) SMITH, DALE C. “GERHARD'S DISTINCTION BETWEEN TYPHOID AND TYPHUS AND ITS RECEPTION IN AMERICA, 1833-1860.” Bulletin of the History of Medicine, vol. 54, no. 3, 1980, pp. 368–385. JSTOR, www.jstor.org/stable/44441270. Accessed 4 Oct. 2020.

5) Foster, Gaines M. “TYPHUS DISASTER IN THE WAKE OF WAR: THE AMERICAN-POLISH RELIEF EXPEDITION, 1919-1920.” Bulletin of the History of Medicine, vol. 55, no. 2, 1981, pp. 221–232. JSTOR, www.jstor.org/stable/44441350. Accessed 4 Oct. 2020.

Response to Peer Review
1) I focused on the signs and symptoms portion because I believed it could be added to and organized. I agree that I was able to do that, but I could also add some small details about the symptoms as well for further information and clarity

2) I agree that I do need to add the information that is in the original article. I wanted to focus on remapping the framework of this section to make it easier to understand and read, but I did not add some of the necessary information from the original article; which I will make sure to do.

3) After looking back at the overview paragraph, I agree that I can focus on the geographical area more rather than saying "developing/third-world countries. Not only would it be a better descriptor, but also these countries are located world-wide. The typhoid epidemic are not necessarily focused in every portion of the world with developing countries, so changing it to a geographical instead would add clarity.

Overview:

Typhus fever is caused by the bacteria Salmonella typhi. Typhus is rare in industrialized country, and occurs primarily in the colder, mountainous regions of central and east Africa, as well as Central and South America. Through history, typhus has spread the most after wars and natural disasters. It is typically spread through contaminated water and food, or with close contact with an individual affected with typhus. Vaccines and antibacterial treatments are available, and are generally successful at curing affected individuals.

Signs and Symptoms:

Symptoms of typhus typically take some time to first appear. The average time for an individual to develop symptoms after initial contact is anywhere from 1 to 3 weeks. Symptoms that develop early on can vary, and these symptoms worsen if the individual does not seek treatment.

Early Symptoms:


 * Fever (typically starting as a low-grade, but increasing with each day)
 * Headache
 * Weakness and Fatigue
 * Body aches
 * Sweating
 * Loss of appetite and weight loss
 * Dry cough
 * Abdominal pain (typically with abdominal swelling)
 * Diarrhea or Constipation
 * Rash (begins on chest approximately 5 days after symptoms appear, spreads throughout as the disease persists)
 * Hypotension (low blood pressure
 * Sensitivity to Light

If treatment is received, these symptoms can be relieved within a week. There are some cases where symptoms persist after the fever is gone or even comeback after they have already went away once, but this does not always happen. However, if treatment is not received, these symptoms can worsen, and new symptoms can develop.

Later Symptoms that develop if treatment is not received.


 * Deliriousness
 * "Typhoid State", which is where the affected individual is motionless and extremely exhausted, with the eyes remaining partially open
 * Death, or development of Life Threatening complications