User:Dylanaunon/Cockfight/Ptcoyle17 Peer Review

General info
(@Dylanaunon)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:[Cite] https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dylanaunon/Cockfight?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Cockfight

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello Dylanaunon,

Firstly, I would recommend reviewing other peers article edits or even Professor Terndrup's article "Abdulcelil Levni" in the dashboard. This is something that helped me to create my article and edits to the best of my capability. The peer review outline will show you the important steps in editing an article as well. To have some more beneficial edits you could work on the lead of the article. As in summarize what cockfighting is and give a brief explanation of its history in the introduction. There is a lot of information and history in your article so I believe it would be easy to add more information or even find citations for within the article. Your description although brief, about cockfighting history in the Philippines is good and I believe could be very good with more information helping the lead and content within the article and another source for better citing.