User:EGC94/User:Roserey/Gabriel Garcia Roman/EGC94 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * I am Reviewing the Gabriel Garcia Roman Article by Roserey.
 * Link: User:Roserey/Gabriel Garcia Roman

Lead:
The lead does include an introductory sentence that clearly defines the article's topic and does not include information included in the rest of the article. Everything mentioned in the Lead has been expanded upon throughout the rest of the article.

Content:
The Content added is relevant to the topic, however not organized as we were assigned to do. Some assigned headings are missing, such as a list of the artists collections and exhibitions. You can see a complete list of the assigned heading and how this article was suggested to be built on blackboard. The article does deal with Wikipedia's equity gap, as the author of the article mentions communities such as LGBTQ.

Tone and Balance:

 * Most of the content remains neutral and there is nothing that appears heavily biased. However, this article does sound personal with a lot of usage of the word "you" when referring to the reader. For example: "Immediately when you see these portraits" and "In this series you can see". Nothing is wrong with that but because there are no images included in this article, it might be best to reword it as "The audience can immediately see" or "viewers of this piece can see...". This will also take the personal tone out of the article, even though there is no bias or any language that tries to persuade the reader.

Sources and References:

 * All the information provided in this article is backed with a reliable secondary source of information.
 * The content accurately portrays what the cited sources say.
 * The sources are thorough even though one is the personal page of the subject I believe it is allowed because it is a public source.
 * The sources are current with the oldest source being from 2017.
 * I was not able to find an allowed source that was not already included in this article.
 * All the links in this article work.

Organization:
Spelling Mistakes:
 * The content is a bit difficult to separate when reading it. Specifically the "The Art" section, where it has sub-sections titled "Inspiration", "Subjects", "Portraits", and "Ericka". Those sections don't flow together under that heading title. Possible solutions can be creating a section titled "Artworks" and placing "Ericka" under there.
 * For the section "Early Life" re-naming it to "Biography" would possibly help since it mentions what the artist/subject is currently doing by including the last sentence "As of today..."
 * For section "Ericka". The quote used is missing the end quotation mark.
 * For the section "Defining You". It is difficult to figure out what the subject is. Is it an artwork or exhibition? Even though the subject is in the title, it is not mentioned in the following paragraph. "Another series that was inspired by..." is not an incomplete sentence but feels like its missing information. Possibly changing it to "Defining You is another series that was inspired by..."
 * For the section "Defining You". "The revisitation of his childhood memories and the challenge that Mexican culture has in sharing deep and personal feelings with a stranger showed itself through the therapy session for Roman." I am not sure what you mean by "the therapy session", what therapy session? From what I have read in the article, I can see that he has visited with psychologists, therapists, or psychiatrists. Possibly changing the wording from "the therapy session" to "a therapy session" can help.
 * For the section "Defining You". "Roman decided to use subjects that are close to him and the portraits you can see that the textures are quite unique as it seems fabric is weaved into them." I believe is missing a word, should be "...close to him and in the portraits...".
 * For the section "Defining You". "You can see there is a central subject presented which is the subject themselves but between the weaved texture there are images presented behind the subject which are photos of their childhood." the word "subject" is repeated too often and makes it hard to understand since there are no images attached. Possibly changing it to something like "In these portraits (pieces) central subjects are depicted with photos of their childhood behind them in between the art's weaved texture."
 * For the section "Lola". "...Lola as the main focus, however the texture behind the subject creates this wall which both associates...". Since this article does not contain images it is best to change the word this to a. "...creates a wall which both associates...".


 * Section: Queer Icons. Sentence: #4 ,"...the subjects he is drawn too..." should be "...the subjects he is drawn to..."

Images and Media:

 * This article does not include any images. Therefore, this section is not necessary and cannot be completed.

For New Articles Only:

 * This article contains 6 references for citations.
 * From what I saw, this current version is not linked to other articles. Adding links to words such as "LGBTQ" and "The Huntington Post" can allow your page to be more discoverable.
 * Everything seems to be nicely sourced and there was no information added to this article that was not correctly cited. This article followed the patterns of other wikipedia articles and accurately presented the subject.

Overall Impressions:
With the available resources and information, this article was neatly and well completed. As a reader, I think the author provided a lot of valuable information on the artist and has done a good job finding reliable resources to back all of the information. However, it does feel really personal because of the amount of "you" 's there are in this article, which is not bad, but does not sound like the language of a wikipedia page. Finding the perfect organization for this page is difficult, but I believe it can be improved.

P.S: Please take my peer review with a grain of salt. I enjoyed what I read and saw that a lot of effort was put into this. Thank you for your time and good luck on your finished product.