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 * Vocal Fry Register: Vocal fry register
 * I chose this article because it is a topic I am interested in, it came from the list of c-rated articles, it had a lot of discussion in its talk page, and it seemed like it needed a lot of work in the actual article itself.

Lead

 * Guiding questions

The article does contain an introductory sentence, it is a bit long, but it clearly describes the article's topic. The lead does not summarize the article. Some information seems irrelevant, such as the fun fact about Tim Storms holding the record for the lowest recorded vocal register. The lead could use some tightening up.


 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Content

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The article's content is relevant. Some of the content is outdated and biased, we now know that vocal fry is not damaging. Content seems misplaced or lacking. Why are they discussing singing in the section about speech? The social implication section could be much larger, it seems like the the speech section is mostly discussing the social implications. This article needs to talk about the actual speech and physicality and historical aspect of vocal fry in more detail. A lot of statements need cited in this article.


 * Is the article's content relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?

Tone and Balance

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This article does not have a neutral tone. This article does have a biased tone towards the idea that vocal fry damages your vocal cords, an idea that people used to believe to be true but we now know is false. This article only represents one viewpoint.


 * Is the article neutral?
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Does the article attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Sources and References

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A lot of the sources used in the article are old. They tend to focus on vocal fry in women. I noticed a few don't come from scholarly, unbiased sources.


 * Are all facts in the article backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Organization

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This article could be written in a more concise way. There are a few grammatical errors. The article is broken down into sections that make sense, I feel that a few sections could be added.


 * Is the article well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the article have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the article well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Images and Media

 * Guiding questions

The article includes an audio example of vocal fry.


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

Checking the talk page

 * Guiding questions

Most of the talk seems focused on the singing portion of the article. Some of the talk clears up the less concise writing in the article. This is a C-rated article. It is part of two projects: WikiProject Opera, and WikiProject Linguistics.


 * What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?
 * How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?
 * How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?

Overall impressions

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My overall impression on this article is that it could use a lot of work. Overall I think it has a lot information that is not incorrect and is has some use if you were in high school or middle school and were working on a project or were maybe just an average everyday person and had a quick question. I wouldn't use this article if I were a professional looking for a serious answer or a college student working on an important essay. The strengths of this article are that it's not too long so people won't get intimated away from reading it. This article could be improved by having more accurate information, better sources, and less information on singing and more information on speech. I think this article in not finished.


 * What is the article's overall status?
 * What are the article's strengths?
 * How can the article be improved?
 * How would you assess the article's completeness - i.e. Is the article well-developed? Is it underdeveloped or poorly developed?

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