User:EN2216/Narrative designer/Roscoetherooster Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

EN2216


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:EN2216/Narrative_designer?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Narrative designer

Lead

 * There is no lead

Content

 * The body gives us in depth information on what a narrative designer is.
 * Could have included more narrative designers.
 * One of the sources is from 2014, but the other one is up to date.
 * The original article does look like it suffers from an equity gap because narrative designers are relatively new there are not a lot of sources.

Tone and Balance

 * The article is very balanced in its tone. The whole article basically gives a very in depth breakdown of what a narrative designer is.
 * Very Neutral

Sources and References

 * There are only two sources and one is from a two minute long YouTube video.
 * The second source is from an article from 2011 from a website i've never heard of, so i don't know how reliable it is.
 * Could have had more sources and added more information.

Organization

 * The content is very well written.
 * Basically no grammatical errors.
 * The content added is well-organized and adds needed information to the original article.

Images and Media

 * There is no media added.
 * could have added some pictures of the cutscenes they were talking about.

Overall Impressions

 * Overall, the article is very well written.
 * You could have added some more examples of what narrative designers do and good examples of video games.
 * Could have added images because i don't really know what you're talking about, there are also no images on the original wiki.