User:ENOZIW/Gender discrimination during Hong Kong protest/BrittanyAngelMa Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Lianawongg


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Lianawongg/Gender discrimination during Hong Kong protest


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello! It's Angel!

Your article is really fascinating and quite important! It was very interesting to read and I have some notes on it below:

There are many great citations and sources which is very good! Your writing style is very clear and I found it very easy to read. The way it is sectioned works very well and the order makes sense.

A lot of the subject matter is very serious and quite powerful and makes it quite difficult to write so I understand some of the writing may come off with some feeling. I think a few portions may need some more neutral language but overall you did a really great job explaining everything in a neutral and serious tone.

The section with the individual cases is great. I think the formatting is very clear and easy to read!

I assume there will be more included as there is a header below for Government Response so I am interested in seeing the additions to the article.

In conclusion, the sourcing and writing is very clear and gets across the information (of which, there is a lot) and the tone is very fitting for the subject matter. Though some writing could be adjusted for more neutral encyclopedia-style knowledge, the article additions are very excellent!

Thank you so much for sharing!