User:ES8592/Principia Ethica/SimplyErinM19 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

ES8592


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:ES8592/Principia_Ethica?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Principia Ethica

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I think it was good. The changes in the leading paragraph made it easier to read and understand. It helped with the flow.

I would change the summary of the article body, it’s a little choppy with the numbers included in the list.

I like what you added about the value of a whole and the values of its parts.