User:ETAPx/Water scarcity in Africa/VUWirk Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:ETAPx


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:ETAPx/Water_scarcity_in_Africa?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Water scarcity in Africa

Evaluate the drafted changes
The content that has been added to the sandbox is relevant information that is not already present in the published article. The new content is also up to date, coming from sources that were published in the last couple of years. It does also deal with an equity gap, reporting on an underprivileged population. The content does heavily feature quotations and I think the new section could be strengthened by taking out the quotations and presenting the information in your own words.

It is presented in a neutral tone and does not convey any biases.

Every statement is backed up by a source and all of the sources are reliable, reputable and good quality. All the links work, are up to date and cover the material that is presented.

The image included provides a better understanding of the content and features a clear and concise caption.

Overall I really like the contributions that have been made so far! My only comment is to use less quotes and more of your own words.