User:EaglesEyes1/Insects as food/Margaretbhanna Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

EaglesEyes1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:EaglesEyes1/Insects_as_food?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Insects as food

Evaluate the drafted changes
Content

The new section you added called "Organoleptic characteristics" is very relevant to the article. You did a good job expanding on the topic. I like that you have added several links to other Wikipedia pages; it really enriches the article. You also did a very good job with your citations because almost every sentence has one and some even have more than one. As for structure and clarity, I think this section may benefit from a few transitional words between ideas. Try using: for example, furthermore, in fact, moreover, in addition, etc.

I found that your revision of the "Challenges and safety concerns" section is also really informative. To improve this section, you could elaborate on what effects the hazards (biological, toxicological, allergenic, etc.) can have on people. For example, name some illnesses that can develop from eating an infected insect. Further, the article mentions that 2 billion people already eat insects daily. How do they acquire them? Are they mostly farmed or caught from the wild? Are these people at higher rick of developing illnesses related to insect consumption? How do they prevent that?

Tone and balance

The content you have added is neutral, non-biased and non-persuasive. Even though the content you have added explains the potential dangers of consuming insects, your wording does not give it a negative connotation. For example, I like how you began your first sentence under "Food safety" (within Challenges and safety concerns). By saying "Like other foods", you emphasize that any food can be a potential health risk, not just insects.

Sources and references

As mentioned above, almost all your sentences have at least 1 citation which is great! There are a few sentences that are missing citations though. For example, the first sentence of your version of "Challenges and safety concerns" and 2 sentences within your last paragraph of that same section.

Great job adding 15 references! Most are credible scientific articles, which is great! The links work too! Most sources are recent enough (within the last 6-8 years or so), which is also great! It is clear that you have put a lot of effort into searching for diverse and credible articles.

Organization

The content you have added is well-written and has no grammar mistakes. The only thing I would advise you to do is to add some transitional words/phrases as mentioned above to make a clear distinction between different ideas.

Images and media

I like the tables you have added. They represent a lot of information in a concise manner. I also like the image you have added under "Food safety". The caption represents the image well. The image helps with understanding the various types of risk factors associated with the consumption of edible insects.

Overall impressions

Overall, I think the information you have added is pertinent, well-cited, well-sourced and objective. It is clear that you have done extensive research on the topic. The tables, images and Wikipedia page links you have used enhance the article. To improve, use transitional words/phrases to improve the flow of your paragraphs and separate ideas. As well, it would be interesting to elaborate on illnesses people can catch from consuming insects (good opportunity to insert more Wikipedia page links) and how they can be prevented.