User:Eaheller13/Language deprivation in deaf and hard of hearing children/Cgaramos Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Eaheller13


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Eaheller13/Language deprivation in deaf and hard of hearing children


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi there! I really loved this article. I think it's so thorough and as a result hits the mark on many of the key pillars of language deprivation. Most of my feedback/review will be high level for this reason. I think from an aesthetic/accessibility standpoint, I think one way to improve this article might be to break up the larger paragraphs into 1-3 sentence chunks if possible. The reason for this is simply that it makes the text more scannable and feels more digestible this way, and as a result might invite more readers to engage with the content. Walls of paragraphs that are too large may detract readers/an audience simply for how daunting it looks, especially so for readers with reading conditions/disabilities such as dyslexia. Otherwise, I think the way the content was broken up and in what order was stellar (beginning with the critical period, moving into legislation etc.) with my only concern being that this article deserves as many readers as possible, even ones that just need a quick scan for a fact or so!