User:Eammarsh/Female Husbands: A Trans History/BridgetMn Peer Review

General info
Svenukm, Eammarsh
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Eammarsh/Female_Husbands%3A_A_Trans_History?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Female Husbands: A Trans History

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

* proposed edits have only been made to the lead section

Lead:

The current lead of the article is quite short. Although it provides relevant information, it could be more detailed

- the edits proposed in the sandbox add more detail to the lead to give the reader context, which is good and helpful for comprehension

- I would perhaps change the wording of the drafted lead. Maintaining the same introduction as the original article, but adding in the proposed extra information such as the definition of a female husband, who popularized it, and other information.

- I believe the information for the lead is good; it is just the wording that needs to be changed

- Furthermore, there needs to be an added citation for the information proposed in the draft or some citation form so the reader and those peer editors can see where the information has come from