User:EamonGaraGrady/Basketball in Africa/Oahmad2019 Peer Review

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Hey Eamon,

It looks like you are still adding in information and content into your article, so I'll just focus more on the bigger picture things. I think the framework you have set out is good, and follows fairly logically. On the history side, if you could add in more information about how basketball first took off in Africa and who was involved in that process, I think that would be really interesting. The more recent info looks like it's on the right track, so the more you could add about the earlier context would be great.

The foreign investment section looks like it'll be really cool, I think just adding in as much information about how these organizations first got involved in Africa and what the relationship looks like on the ground would be the most useful.

The BAL section is really strong here, and I'd just say to keep doing what you're doing on that front and build it out even more (similarly for the Women's Basketball section). It might also be good to have a historical list of league winners, and/or which teams tend to be better.

One other potential section could be to talk more about the Africa to NBA pipeline, and how players go from playing in their home countries to the US. The process by which this happens isn't immediately evident, and could be an interesting piece to add. It might include things like scouting, setting up camps, giving young players college scholarships, etc.

Overall, looks like you're on the right track and have a good framework to keep plugging away at it!