User:Earthslug/Urban sprawl/Tamaflam Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Earthslug


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Earthslug/Urban_sprawl?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Urban sprawl

Evaluate the drafted changes
This draft is very concise and straight to the point. The content was neutral and did not seem to lean any particular way! Something I would improve on is maybe the sentence structures in your History section specifically. Both sentences could be broken down into two. For example, for the second sentence you can end the sentence at "qualities" and then start a new one. For example, that sentence could read as: "The theory of "flight from blight" explains that aspects of living in urban areas, such as high taxes, crime rates, poor infrastructure and school qualities. All of these aspects, and more, resulted in many people moving out of urban areas and into surrounding suburban cities." That way it's a bit smoother to read. The section could maybe be a bit more extensive and I would be really interested to read about where the term came from and under what political climate did it come to be, if it's not already mentioned in the article. Another suggestion would be to expand a bit on the policies you mentioned in relation to alternative development styles. You could give an example of land use policies, if there are any, or comment on how these policies impact urban sprawl specifically. Other than that, I think the content provided will improve the overall quality of the article but needs a little bit more development and editing. Good job!