User:Ebbenw/Hydrogen breath test/Piper5625 Peer Review

General info
Ebbenw
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * https://w.wiki/9e6n
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://w.wiki/9e6o

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

As of right now, I don't think you need to edit the lead section too much. It looks like you are just deleting small sections of the article, and those details don't show up in the lead section at all. Also, the lead section does talk about carbon dioxide near the end, and the rest of the article doesn't talk about that at all. You could probably either delete the information about carbon dioxide in the lead (since it doesn't have a citation) or you could add information about it later in the article under "Alternative test methods".

Content:

What you have planned for adding to the article about research done for the test looks good. It will help that you have found reliable sources to use for citing.

Tone and Balance:

Overall, I think the article is pretty neutral, so there isn't anything to do there.

Sources and References:

About half of the sources from the original article are pretty old, but I would recommend focusing on adding your own sources to parts of the article that aren't cited. Throughout the entire article, it seems like there are big chunks that aren't cited, and you have a good start at verifying that information by striking through the parts about the SIBO breath test.

Organization:

I think that the information that is included in the original article is well-organized. If you were to add information about preparing for the test, I would suggest creating a new section under "Conditions" but above "Alternative test methods" since it would be helpful for the audience to read about the uses of the test and then about how they can prepare for it.

After updating/adding more references and including a section about preparing, the article will seem more useful to the audience, especially if this is their first time reading about the hydrogen breath test. Great job so far!