User:Echinacea10/Poverty in Indonesia/Xiyuanwu Peer Review

Hello!

I really like your passage! They sounds interesting and clear to understand! Just few questions:


 * 1) What is "Rp217 trillion" in your first paragraph?
 * 2) In the second paragraph, you mentioned that "The existence of the Faith Based Organization (FBO) does play an important role in providing welfare services, but the existence of FBO does not always have a good impact on certain community groups." Does Zakat  also a kind of FBO? If so, maybe we can move the sentence and put it after the "welfare service programs carried out by Christians and Catholics" part?
 * 3) "The lack of cooperation between the government and the FBO is also one of the factors in the overlapping program between the FBO and the government." Maybe instead of "factors" you mean "problem" there?
 * 4) https://www.worldatlas.com/articles/countries-with-the-largest-muslim-populations.html maybe this link need a full citation..?

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