User:Ecp7201/Bat Creek Inscription/Ethanmorriis Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ecp7201


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Ecp7201/Bat Creek Inscription
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bat Creek inscription

Evaluate the drafted changes
LEAD

The lead contains a lot of detail but is a bit choppy, could use some work on the fluidity of the heading. I appreciate the amount of detail they have put into describing the history of The Bat Creek Inscription, dating back to the date it was excavated. I think that its excavation is a great point to have in the lead but all of the following history may be better-off in its own section. Despite the extensive history included in the lead section, it provides a great overview of The Bat Creek Inscription.

ARTICLE BODY

The physical description has given me a great idea of the size of the tablet, though I hope they will include some photos as well to act as a visual representation. Same as before, the article body lacks fluidity, with some grammatical errors making it feel choppy. I appreciate the attention to detail, especially in its own dedicated section, though it just needs to be edited so that it is more fluid and less choppy.

OVERALL

The article has a lot of great information but it needs to have dedicated sections so that readers can easily navigate the article and find the information they are looking for. As well as this, the article is pretty choppy and has quite a few grammatical errors but contains great information. Reread and make sure that the grammar is correct.