User:Ecp7201/Bat Creek Inscription/Yvette Dana Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ecp7201


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ecp7201/Bat_Creek_Inscription?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bat Creek inscription

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead is extremely long and very detailed. It may be helpful to shorten it by presenting the topics with little detail. The details are supposed to be in the body of the article, not the lead. However, the lead does talk about every section in the article and does not include anything not present it the article. It seems that the peer clarified information which is very beneficial. The name John Emmert was added and explained to be the founder of this inscription. There are some grammar issues that need to be fixed. For example, in the second sentence there should be a period after Cherokee, not a comma.