User:Ecruz6/Causes of mental disorders/TorresM16 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Ecruz6)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Talk: Causes of mental disorders


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Causes of mental disorders

Evaluate the drafted changes
The introduction is short and has a brief section on the subtopics that will be later discussed. Overall the introduction flows together smoothly not to much is going on in the introduction and is easy to read.

In the Research Result; I'm not sure if I see a reference with the definition of the word "Adverse Experience," because I personally didn't know what it meant.

The graph that was included next tot the introduction does it go with the research result or the introduction because it hasn't been discussed. I also think that there should be some more charts to show different results of different research.

Although the subtopic of Research Result I believe has one study, personally I felt like the study needs to be changed because it doesn't have statistics or specific in depth causes to mental health.

In the subtopic of theories I think it would be interesting if you added the theorist who discovered the causes to mental disorder if there was a specific theorist. I was confused on the entire section of Biopsychosocial Model and the Biopsychosocial Model. Are these models related to the General Theory or what aspect do they play to theories in this section. I think that sense Psychoanalytic Theory and Attachment Theory are theories, they should be moved to be under the General Theories sense they are theories.

Overall the article is well written, needs a few corrections to be done, that are mentioned in the article already. I think that because this topic is about the focus on causes of mental disorder there should be more graphics to what is the main lead to a mental disorder, and how it can be treated besides medication and counseling. I think this article is well organized, well referenced, and has enough information on what is mental disorder.