User:Ed.osterberger/Communication studies/Bugcruncher Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ed.Osterberger


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ed.osterberger/Communication_studies?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Communication studies

Evaluate the drafted changes
Content

I felt that the content was good but was less sure about the relevance. I can see how Business Communication Studies ties into Communication Studies, but I think that the overarching article doesn't go as much into disciplines. It could potentially be out of place. Granted, I don't know where you plan on putting your sections. Overall the information and the writing itself is good but I am not sure about placement and relevance.

Tone

The tone is nice and neutral. Something about the phrasing "imperative to successful business" struck me as maybe biased? I'll admit I am being nitpicky on this so take it with a grain of salt, but I think qualifying it as necessary for success might be a weird way to word it. Maybe it sounds to opinionated to me? I think shifting the words would solve this but also it's not a big deal.

Sources and References

The sources and references all look solid. I see multiple journal articles. I think that these are some of the most effective sourcing you could pick for the topic.

Organization

"With business communication being a rather new field that is undergoing constant changes, grasping a direct definition would be rather difficult" My only issue is that you use "rather" twice in a sentence. Your writing is good, but you could spice this one up and separate it into multiple sentences or maybe change wording