User:Edfc1902/Media monitoring/Pavarotticarotte Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Shav21 and Edfc1902


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Edfc1902/Media_monitoring?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Media monitoring

Evaluate the drafted changes
The Lead section has been expanded and the topic has been presented with increased precision. For instance, while in the initial version there were some broad phrases (such as "and so on"), that was replaced with more specific details. The updated Lead section alludes to most of the article's major sections, contrarily to the original version, although these should probably be mentioned explicitly so as to maximise clarity. The Lead section is of appropriate length and does not delve in excessive detail, and a clear concluding sentence in the end of the section was included. On the other hand, the section should be revised for orthographic mistakes and grammatical errors. Moreover, only two sources were used to write a significant section, and more sources could be added to ensure that the information presented is unbiased, reliable, and that different perspectives on the topic are presented.