User:EdieJones71/Canopic jar/Hush Muninn Peer Review

General info
EdieJones71
 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:EdieJones71/Canopic jar - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Canopic jar - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * 1) The Lead Section: The picture from the original article added to the viewing experience, as a reader who does not know what a canopic jar looks like would be easily able to understand what the subject of the article looks like. I would suggest adding the picture back. Also, the lead had a decent amount of information removed from it without much to replace it. I think that the information given in the current version is important to expand upon, not reduce.
 * 2) Clarity of Article Structure: The Use and Design section from the article would be beneficial to include before the Design and Significance section you added. Combining the design portion of your draft with the use and design section would allow for a further expansion of the ideas there. Then you could have a Significance section in which you include the discussions of the gods and how canopic jars relate to the ancient Egyptian understanding of life after death.
 * 3) Coverage Balance: There is not much to discuss on this topic, so just adding information to what you already have and reintroducing the sections removed would expand the scope of the article.
 * 4) Content Neutrality: No hard stance is taken on any specific topic, so I say that you succeeded on this point.
 * 5) Sources:  The sources you have are not properly formatted, but you seem to have enough references. If you are referencing the same source within its same page range, you could consolidate the links to the references to make navigating the sources easier for the reader.

Overall Thoughts:

I do not understand why you removed the pictures and a good portion of the information given within the article. What you added is solid, but it is not substantial enough to fully explain your topic. Improving the catalogue of your sources, adding more information, and either putting the pictures back in or finding more pictures would benefit your work greatly.