User:Edpe77/Gender neutrality in languages with grammatical gender/HUSR320 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * User:Edpe77


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Edpe77/Gender_neutrality_in_languages_with_grammatical_gender?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Gender neutrality in languages with grammatical gender
 * Gender neutrality in languages with grammatical gender

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The first paragraph of the overview that was entirely rephrased was done well. The original wording was not as clear and concise as it is now with the changes made to the article. Additional information was added using the cited sources to better reflect what the article will be discussing as well as give an in-depth overview as opposed to the original paragraph which was lacking citations for its sources.

However, it may be that large portions of the article were directly copied to the sandbox which may pose a problem per the wikipedia rules. The minor grammatical corrections made allow for an easier reading and removed the confusion the original text was causing. Edpe77 followed instructions regarding edit summaries and provided specific information on what edits were done as well as providing a reason for them. Overall, Edpe77 found issues with the original article that may have been difficult to spot and or which would have posed to be a challenge when making corrections.