User:EdwinHartlove/Georg Olden (graphic designer)/Ethan4757 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

EdwinHartlove


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:EdwinHartlove/Georg Olden (graphic designer)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Georg Olden (graphic designer)

Evaluate the drafted changes
In the second paragraph "During this time, Olden worked for some of America's leading artists, designers and writers and made contacts that opened significant professional opportunities...", I feel like there can more details of incidents and specific names include in the article. In addition, I saw a large part of article that does not include any citation of sources and it makes the article less convincing.

Other than that, the article itself is relatively easy to read and gives numerous information about the person's career; with more arrangement of references, the draft itself will improve significantly.