User:Eesakguee/Methanococcus maripaludis/Klm01011 Peer Review

General info
Eesakguee
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Eesakguee/Methanococcus maripaludis
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Methanococcus maripaludis

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Lead: The lead of this article is well-worded and clear. It hits all the points I would haver thought to ask including where it is found, the kind of respiration it performs, and whether it is gram-negative or gram-positive. It also discusses that the microbe is a coccus shape. This area discusses general information that you look for in an introduction, and begins to introduce what will be discussed more later in the article.

Content: It appears that the Metabolism section is the one with the most edits to the original article. Not only does this article link the different ways the microbe performs metabolic processes, but it also goes more in depth into each kind. This is helpful for the user, but formatting is a little strange. Good work with linking your sources! It also appears that the rest of the content including cell structure and general characteristics are still under construction, so I would recommend adding details about what pH this microbe prefers, as well as temperature. These are concepts covered in class that would be beneficial to add to your article. Now that we have discussed genetics of microbes, I would also try to include some information on that. I also feel that a good contribution to your article would be its significance in the world. Is your microbe disease-causing? Essential for marine biolife? How does it add to its environment? This could be made into a new section that would help the article.

Tone/Balance: The article appears to reflect a neutral tone which is consistent with what Wikipedia looks for. Because this article isn't reflecting any kind of bias, this area looks good! You also do a good job of writing in the correct viewpoint, making sure not to speak as a writer.

Sources/References: I appreciate your linking of articles in the correct manner! A lot of your words are linked to other pages of Wikipedia (great job!). It does appear that some articles are used many times in a certain paragraph, so if possible, try to find some other articles to support your points. I found some great resources for my own article on PubMed, so I would recommend there if you haven't already tried!

Images/Media: Try to add a picture of your microbe if possible! Also, some images of the different metabolic pathways could be helpful.These images could be captioned with some of the things you discuss under each pathway which will help the reader get a clear image of the pathway that may be otherwise confusing to understand.

Organization: While some of your article is not present on the Sandbox page, your organization looks clear. It introduces the microbe, the discusses specifics, and ends with your references. This structure is easy to follow and understandable for the reader. I would look into formatting those bullet points differently, but other than that, great job!

Overall Impressions: You have put a great deal of work into the Metabolism section of your article. This area looks very well-detailed and would only benefit with some images. The rest of the article is still in the works, but your notes indicate you have some specific areas to hone in on that will be helpful to the article. You are at a good point in the article and I look forward to reading your finished product!

~ Kennedy Montfort