User:Egonz102/Sustainable agriculture/Blue.Slip16 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Egonz102


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Egonz102/Sustainable_agriculture?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sustainable agriculture

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Hey, you have some really good information here! And it adds more depth to the existing article, plus I like how you divided the policies from New Deal, to 50s, to future ones with the Green New Deal. I would suggest you go a little more in depth with naming specific policies, stating "New Deal" and "50s policy" is vague, what regulations/policies specifically were passed?

I like the source you've used, especially since it is quite recent which means more accurate and up-to-date information, but don't forget to cite it properly in your writing! You don't wanna miss points for something so simple. Adding a couple more sources will make your wiki project solid along with helping you include any more information you can.

Lastly, the structure you have right now seems like an outline. I do like the breakdown of including the "History" subtitle, that gives your draft a nice flow instead of it being a simple info dump! Keep the breakdown you have, but make it less bullet-point-y and more paragraph-y.

You're doing really well so far, with a couple changes to structure and a couple more source, along with a quick proofread, you'll be good to go!