User:Ejleonh680/Frank Bowling/Imire1 Peer Review

I think you picked a really great artist and i am excited to see how your article turns out. I have some notes to help with coming up with edits to make:

- Maybe set up the exhibitions and collections as bullet points so they are easier to read through.

- The statement about bowling being married to Rachel Scott confused me a lil because the next sentence was about his marriage to a different women. When did he marry Scott? Maybe find that out and organize that section by timeline. Like if that is his current wife, put that he is currently married to her at the end

- the critical assessment section feels a lil biased, if it is supposed to be referencing art critics maybe name then in the quotes and see if you can find some more neutral or negative critiques.

- sam cornish (in the critical assessment section) has a wiki you can link

- maybe try to use your sandbox more even to just block out thoughts and make a plan