User:Ejleonh680/Frank Bowling/Zmarks1 Peer Review

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There isn't any work yet in the sandbox, which is okay! Reviewing the article however I have seen a few points from the article should be worked on. The one section that stood out the most to me is the family life. Not only does it have grammatical errors but it does not use the information in the section responsibly. The wives that Frank Bowling had are all not written in a way that would be easy for people to understand. The same is said for his children, not only is the description not detailed but it is hard to follow.