User:Ekarck/DDR German/Damianperea31 Peer Review

General info
Damian - Damianperea31
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Ekarck/DDR German
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * DDR German:

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? The lead is mostly up-to-date but there is no line about the pronunciation of DDR German even though you added it as a new section in the article body. These is not minor issue, but I think adding something quick about pronunciation would reflect the newly added information.

Content


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes all the information that has been added is used well to further define what DDR German is and why it is diffferent to West German.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? I think that there could be some information added about the DDR German that is "the critically humorous one of everyday life" since it is talked about in the lead? If there is none, since there is no source for that statement, would it be possible to delete section?

Tone and Balance


 * Is the content added neutral? I think the information for the most part has a neutral tone and the sources you use for the body are equally used, so there is no one perspective being pushed. However, the difference between socialist and everyday DDR German is mentioned, but there is only information on the socialist side of DDR German. I think it would be a good idea to add some information about the everyday DDR German to create a more neutral tone.

Organization


 * I s the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes I think the information is clear and easy to read. Each paragraph desrcibes a new feature in a few sentences and there is one more sentence with an example.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? The new information is broken down into two distinct and relevants sections to make the information easy to read. I would maybe put the Vocabulary section first in the article body, instead of the Pronunciation and Grammar section, becuase it is the more important section and it is more developed.

Overall impressions


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? The information added has greatly improved the article. The original article only had a lead, the new information added details about DDR German that better informs the reader about what DDR German is specifically. The information is also very concise and easy to read.
 * How can the content be improved? I would add one more sentence to the lead to make sure all the sections in the article's body are introduced, specifically about pronunciation and put the vocabulary section first. As I mentioned above, there is information missing on the everyday features of DDR German. If possible, adding information on this would improve the article?