User:Ekarck/DDR German/Sarahwhitelaw Peer Review

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Ekarck
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Ekarck/DDR German
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):DDR German

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Hi Ellie! This is such an interesting article. It was so fun for me to learn about something new! I never knew anything about DDR German. Also, I think you are really making this article so much better after reading the existing article!

Something that I think could be beneficial (that is also something that I considered doing in my article) would be putting the vocabulary section before the pronunciation & grammar section. Since you say that the most prominent feature of DDR German is the vocabulary that sprouted from this era. I also think it could be great for the flow of the article since you start out talking about the history of the development of this dialect and the vocabulary goes along with that. You could even transition into that "pronunciation & grammar" paragraph by saying something like "Vocabulary was not the only thing affected, changes also occurred at the phonological level."

Speaking of the pronunciation, would it be possible to include examples of how pronunciation and grammar differed? Or maybe not, but I found myself wanting to know more about how exactly these pronunciations differed!

I also really liked the way that you emphasized transitions so that it makes the article more readable for your audience. This is something I really want to keep in mind when writing my article as well!

Great job Ellie!