User:Ekf22/Southerners on new ground/RhetoricH&W2022 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ekf22 (same draft as Ninaflinn, Tenarg)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ekf22/Southerners_on_new_ground?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Southerners On New Ground

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

This is nitpicky (sorry!) but it would promote clarity if you moved the (commonly referred to as SONG) to the lead since you start using that acronym early on.

We think the lead's concision could be slightly improved if you condense/combine the multiple sentences on what is "unique" about the organization. Also, in order to promote objectivity, maybe have a brief section in the lead explicitly dedicated to the website's mission--you could directly quote here if helpful!--that would allow you to characterize the organization's goals without it coming across as a sort of promotion for SONG.

Also, we were curious as to the public response to this organization's work, since most of the content seems to be coming from the perspective of this organization itself. We're also interested in how the group gets its funding--is it a non-profit?

(There might be a citation missing in the last paragraph on "History")