User:Elaina65/sandbox

Evaluation Notes

 * The Coffee Bean and Tea Leaf
 * Article keeps everything relevant to the topic. doesn't veer off as much
 * Unbiased, talks about the company history
 * Talks mostly about the history for a big chunk of it, then much smaller amounts for the rest
 * Numerous references; Magazines, News Articles, etc...
 * Not much in talk section, mostly more info. on topic
 * It is an informative topic, mostly on the history of the Coffee and Tea Leaf company

Add to an Article
Pride and Prejudice is a romantic novel based around the protagonist Elizabeth Bennet and her life in the 1800s.

Article Proposal and Draft
I will be editing the article about Color Guard. I will be adding sections to the article, as well as fixing up some grammar issues that are in other paragraphs as well. It is a starter class, so it has room for much improvement. It also contains false information of the sport and the way it is performed. I am proposing to change most of the mistakes and also create an entire new section. The article also has very few pictures, and this is a very visual sport, so I'm planning to add some visuals to create a better effect to what color guard is. The databases I am going to use is from the IUP library including, "Color Guard Competition" by Terry Usilton, "Techniques of Color Guard" by Karyn Sloan, and "Participation In Winterguard international..." by Mark Waymire and other contributors.

Comments from Dr. Vetter
Hi Elaina, Great start on this proposal and bibliography. I think the article Color Guard presents a number of opportunities for additions and improvements. I would recommend that you work with some of the suggested fixes/recommendations that are detailed in the banner at the top of the article. These include adding citations and re-summarizing content that is too closely paraphrasing sources. These revisions would really help improve existing content, and then you can also add new information. I think I can help you with the images. I like the sources you have so far. But I'm confused about how you're using the term "database" - we'll talk more about this tomorrow. Good work! -Dr. Vetter

Article Draft
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Color_guard_(flag_spinning)

Whole new section on basics and techniques. Added all new information in the section about Winter Guard. Also, I just fixed different grammar and spelling mistakes.

Revision Plan
The feedback given to me has helped me improve areas of my article that still need revising and that I was not able to finish. This is the list of some of the improvements that can be made:


 * Learn how to add pictures onto Wikipedia
 * Add more techniques that are useful
 * Add article changes to Sandbox

Pettigrew
Though Wikipedia is a good place to be able to do more research and thinking, it is also helpful for college students to be able to have their own point of view on topics and to be able to argue relentlessly for it.

IUP Wiki-A-Thon

 * Esther Lape
 * Integrated personal information to have one big section
 * Added information to the top of the page