User:ElainaM2456/Community management/Hanfino Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

ElainaM2456


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:ElainaM2456/Community_management?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Great article!

You were consistent on how neutral you kept it throughout the article

I would say consider making the third bullet point in problems with community management possibly the first, as I felt it would be the strongest initial point to flow into other ideas.

I also really liked this point at the end "In the case of internet resources, the privileging of certain kinds of data transfer may ensure a better overall quality of service for most users, as opposed to the doctrine of network neutrality." , maybe expand on it !

Also good job on your resources!

Lead -

there is not a lead here, however it goes straight to the point and I do not think it is necessary to add a lead with this topic

Content -

The content added is relevant to the overall wikipedia page and may overlap a bit. Maybe focus on differentiating yours a bit more in a new section, or creating a lead and then your seperate section

Tone -

I believe the contribution were neutral and direct.

Sources -

The sources utilized are sufficient in delivering the authors message

Organization - the entire piece flows very well

Images -

Does not apply to this page

I believe it may be beneficial change the beginning of this sentence "The major key aspect of community management.."

possibly reword as well "Money collecting issues are a main problem in poorer areas because if not everyone is paying a fee"