User:Elainewongso/Persuasive writing/Kat3r1nayr Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Elainewongso


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 * User:Elainewongso/Persuasive writing


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 * Persuasive writing

Evaluate the drafted changes
-"It is a form of non-fiction writing the writer uses to develop logical arguments,"

- this section of your lead is worded a little confusing, honestly I could be wrong but even saying "...non-fiction writing a writer uses..." sounds better

-first paragraph of body is good! find that citation!!!

-"rhetoric, craftsmanship, authenticity, reflexivity, and imagination". Could you possibly link these to other wikepedia pages?

- find citations for the third paragraph of the body!

- for the third body paragraph I would also split it into different sections/different paragraphs when you are talking about pathos, ethos, Logos. This will make it clear what each paragraph is talking about and will make it easier for the reader to see what is being said.

-"Researches found that recognizing opposing points of view and providing substantial rebuttals makes a paper much more convincing and persuasive " - proof read this sentence!

"The Toulmin Model of Argumentation", link this to another wikipedia article if it exists

- I don't think you need the examples of good persuasive writing. In my opinion it seems like you're adding bias with your own opinion by saying these are good examples.

-"The first step entails explaining what the SRSD strategy is, the following step is to develop an idea of what a good essay is. The third step is using an example of how to draft and write a good essay, next is to memorize all the tools learned in the SRSD strategy using games. The fifth step is for students to work in groups to put all of it to practice, and finally is to try making a persuasive piece of work individually." split this section up into a sentence per step because otherwise it is a little confusing. A more clear explanation of each step will be beneficial.

-I would also consider adding subsections and subheadings to the article for easier readability.

-overall good improvements to the article!