User:Elainewongso/Persuasive writing/MeganMezera Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Elainewongso


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Elainewongso/Persuasive_writing?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Persuasive writing

Evaluate the drafted changes
Great work with the draft, all of your additions seem to flow with the already-established article! Overall, I just have a few notes with formatting, which I've listed below.


 * 1) some of your sentences are a bit wordy and could be more concise to fit with Wikipedia
 * 2) example: "...numerous excellent examples..."
 * 3) the last sentence doesn't have a explanation about how they're relevant to persuasive writing, so, that addition would be necessary if you'd like to include it
 * 4) for the stepwise explanation of SRSD, it might be better to list them, rather than say 'first step, second step, etc.'

Otherwise, awesome job, I really liked that you chose something outside the typically scientific applications and related it back!