User:Elainewongso/Persuasive writing/Mwongz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Elainewongso


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Elainewongso/Persuasive_writing?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Persuasive writing

Evaluate the drafted changes
I really enjoyed your addition of talking about the categories of persuasive writing and then further explaining what each category refers to. For an article that's all about persuasive writing, this is a must-have addition and I'm actually a bit shocked that it wasn't initially included when the article was made. Furthermore, I thought that your brief explanation for each category of persuasive writing was really well done as it gave us the essential information in understanding what each category entails. One thing that I would've liked to see is for you to reference (not cite, I mean like make a hyperlink) the wikipedia articles of the categories that you mentioned. For example, when you mention rhetoric, maybe link it to the rhetoric wikipedia article so that people can dive further into rhetoric if they have an interest in learning more about it.

For the argumentation paragraph, I also think that this is pretty well written and a good addition to the article. Similar to before, it would be nice to link the wikipedia article relating to The Toulmin Model of Argumentation so that readers can dive deeper if they want to. While your explanation of the Toulmin Model of Argumentation is sufficient, if you could somehow fit a brief explanation for the components like you did earlier in categories of persuasive writing, that would give your reader a brief idea of what each component encompasses.

I thought that the section on how to improve persuasive writing was really unique and an interesting addition to the article as it pretty much starts a new subheading for the article where future editors can add to how to improve persuasive writing.

I'm not entirely sure on this one but it might be better to not include the examples of persuasive writing since persuasive writing can be subjective and by giving examples, it kind of shows your own opinion which shouldn't be in an article.

Overall, I thought all the additions you made were great to the article. I would've loved to see more linking to other wikipedia articles and if possible, maybe provide citations for the existing information on the article since I noticed that while your added work was all cited well, some of the existing work wasn't. For example, one of the citations literally says "citation needed"