User:Elainewongso/Persuasive writing/Rebekah Greenwood Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Elainewongso)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Sandbox Draft


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Persuasive writing

Evaluate the drafted changes
- Good editing. Reading the original article there are some awkward sentences/grammar issues that you've aptly corrected!

- Something minor: perhaps refer to writers as 'a writer' instead of 'the writer'.

- While I appreciate the increased cohesiveness you brought to the article, I think it would be helpful to maintain sections in the article body. As a lazy reader I often skip to the section I need based on the header. Sections titled 'aesthetic features' or 'methods of improving persuasive writing' might be applicable!

- Some links to other wiki pages could be added (ex: 'rhetoric', 'imagination', etc)

- Are 'STOP' and 'DARE' acronyms? If so the full length version needs to be written as well in the first mentioning

- For the very last sentence, can you be more broad as to the fields the examples relate to? Like healthcare or environment etc.

- Great job overall! I think I learned quite a bit!

R