User:Elawson123/LGBT rights organization/CardamomEnthusiast Peer Review

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Elawson123


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LGBT rights organization

Evaluate the drafted changes
There is a lot of room for expansion in this article. The lead section provides a good overview of the spectrum of political affiliations that LGBT rights organizations fall on. Every area of the history section needs a lot more information- also, since the article doesn't pertain to the history of LGBT rights organizations specifically, there are many other sections about LGBT rights organizations that could be added. There need to be several grammar corrections and neutrality corrections- for example the quotation marks need to be removed from around "obscenity" and "members" needs to be "members'."