User:Elawson123/LGBT rights organization/MNC-2016 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Elawson123, Jcrg34, Tge3hn


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * No draft yet
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * LGBT rights organization

Evaluate the drafted changes
LGBT Rights Organization

Lead section


 * Include other less well known organizations that are outside Western culture (China? Japan? India?)
 * Updates of LGBTQ+ instead of LGBT
 * Concise, tone and balance are neutral and doesn't give any persuasion

History


 * Expansion of The Mattachine Society (no info, only section title)
 * Discussion of anything that can be found pre-late 19th century (anything earlier?)
 * Discussion of orgs that were relevant during Stonewall (~1968-1979)
 * Expansive expansion needed of 21st century organizations (there are so many, too many to name, examples HRC, GLAAD, The Trevor Project, etc.)
 * Inclusion of non Western LGBTQ rights organizations