User:ElectricFalcon7/Environmental effects of mining/UC1795 Peer Review

General info
ElectricFalcon7 (Devin Snyder)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:No draft shared
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Environmental effects of mining

Evaluate the drafted changes
In sections which Devin said he edited, he gave good explanations about the impact of phosphate mining on coral reef biodiversity in a studied area off the coast of Christmas Island, the impacts of deep sea mining on deep sea aquatic ecosystems, and the indirect impacts of mining on biodiversity. I think that the parts he edited were consistent in writing and theme to the rest of the paper and clearly expanded on the topic.

Some changes that I would suggest would be to use more approachable language that is understandable by an audience without a technical background in the field. Another potential change could be to address the ways in which various pollutants hurt ecosystems. Many parts of the article simply state that they do but do not address exactly why.

The biggest thing I would change would be to cut back on technical phrasing and try to be a bit more concise.