User:Elhefe3192/Moon Rabbit/Kannbee Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Elhefe3192


 * Link to the current version of the article:
 * Moon rabbit
 * Moon rabbit

Evaluate the drafted changes
There is currently no posted draft/edits, so I am going to make comments on the original article and what I personally think can be updated, changed, or added.

For the lead, I would try changing it up a bit to make it more clear and concise. There doesn't appear to be a good structure to the lead in that it doesn't lay out what the article is going to look like for the readers.

Overall, lengthwise the article has a decent amount of information. I think adding a bit more depth and information to the history column would be beneficial. In the history column, I am not sure if they're referring to or if they mention the true origin of the "Moon Rabbit". Researching and clarifying that would help.

There are plenty of images, which is nice, but you could try adding some more to the end of the article around where it talks about Modern References.

As for grammatical errors, I do see some here and there with capitalization and punctuation. I would skim through and edit what you can find. It also seems that they are directly quoting in some places and not citing. They also seem to directly quote or paraphrase quite a lot.