User:Elijah Whalen/Great bison belt/AbbieAver Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Elijah Whalen


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Elijah%20Whalen/Great_bison_belt?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Great bison belt
 * Great bison belt

Evaluate the drafted changes
Role of bison: I think the fire aspect that you added is important information. If possible you should expand upon how the fires provide more food. I thought that sentence was interesting but I was left wondering how that worked. Additionally, I think it would be great to add an example of fires helping bison populations increase from a recent event or in the past. I think there needs to be more discussion about how the wolves and bison interact as well. it feels like that sentence was included but not really discussed again. Finding information on this could also give you more sources to add to the article.

Human changes: I really like the idea of separating the human changes between pre and post colonial contact. We forget that people were changing and interacting with the environment before colonization. This could also be a good place to include more information about fires and why plains natives used controlled burns. I also think this could also be a good place to discuss traditional hunting methods of Plains Natives before discussing how the introduction of horses changed the hunting practices. In the post-colonization section I think you should talk about how horses and bison compete today if that is something that occurs.

Overall: I think your content is relevant and adds value to the article. Your draft has has a neutral tone which is important. Your separation of time in the human changes section will improve the organization and depth of knowledge of the original article. I think it would be beneficial to find more sources if possible to include in your edits. These sources could come from more information about controlled burns or wolves interactions with bison. Your changes are adding more of the Plains Natives perspectives which I think is very valuable to this article. With a little more information and sources I think the original article will be much improved by your work!